Night Mistress

oh god. i feel so sorry for your MC now. my stomach twisted as i read the line "valerie, Adam is dead." it made me want to cry. i see ...

re-read through you work. you got a couple of mistakes. like dead blood red roses. make sure if you use more than one adjective, use commas or it will just ...

it's interesting. i like your details and eveything. pm me when you put up another piece.

oh, come on. someone has had to read this book.

Thanks. I feel better about the prolouge, like it stronger and it will draw the reader into wanting to read the story.

I like it. I don't see anything wrong with it, but it still bothers you, ask a Mod to look over it to for you. I like the emotion in ...

hey, Savannah! if you need anything, feel free to pm me. Welcome to YWS! You will love it here.

hey, lily! if you anything, feel free to pm me.

Hey, Sarah! If you need anything, let me know. okay? I am going into college this year too. I am a computer Science Major.

Hey, Merry! Thanks for reading my stories. if you need anything, let me know okay.

Let me guess the guy from the preface, Cain, is her surprise? It's a very interesting story, and you got me waning to read they other when they are post. ...

Defendly got my attention. I thought i would re-pay you by reading your story. I like the mask part. *on to read the other parts*

There. I have edited. I took some of the suggestion and I didn't. Please don't get offensive if i didn't use what you want me to. If you still find ...

There. I have edited. I took some of the suggestion and I didn't. Please don't get offensive if i didn't use what you want me to. If you still find ...

Wow! i could pratically feel the emotion coming off of this chapter. the one thing that puzzles me : why is Carmen pushing Issac to Sohpia? I get the feeling ...